The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
The illustration, divided into three age brackets, reveals three dilemmas reported by individuals that chose to reside abroad in a foreign country. Overall, 18-34 year olds chose making friends, ages 35-54 listed finding somewhere to live and the over 55 age bracket reported learning a local language as their most challenging criteria.
The 18-34 year olds listed their difficulties of making friends, finding somewhere to live and learning the local language at 46, 40, and 29 percent, respectively. At the opposite end of the spectrum, the over 55 age group selected learning the local language at a significantly high rate of 54%, while finding a residence and making friends at far lower rates of 22% and 23%, correspondingly. Meanwhile those aged 35-54 had the most balanced list of challenges in acquiring the language, securing a residence, and making acquaintances at 35, 39, and 36 percent, respectively.
It can be generally inferred that in this chart the difficulty of language acquisition goes up with age while the challenges of making friends reveals just the opposite. Lastly, participants from ages 18-54 year listed finding a residence as significantly challenging while those over 55 found it to be the least pressing quandary.
Coherence and Cohesion
Grammatical Range and Accuracy 9
All parts of the task were achieved fully. There was a clear summary [Overall…], and all the key features were illustrated clearly
There is a clear overall progression in the piece, with a wide range of cohesive devices [their | respectively | correspondingly | Meanwhile | this chart].
There is full flexibility and precision of expression, as reflected by the effective paraphrasing [18-34 year olds | ages 35-54 | over 55 age group] and use of less common vocabulary [reside abroad | generally inferred | least pressing quandary].
There is a wide range of structures with full control over use [divided into three age brackets | their most challenging criteria | at the opposite end of the spectrum | the difficulty of language acquisition goes up with age].
Task 2: It is difficult for people in the cities to get enough physical exercise. What are the causes and solutions?
Exercise and physical fitness are an integral part of a healthy life and currently urban residents are struggling to attain enough of these in their daily lives. In this essay I will discuss some of the dilemmas of this phenomenon as well as offer some recommendations.
A modern urban lifestyle is not as conducive as it could be in affording adequate exercise for individuals. First and foremost, urban citizens do not have enough time to exercise as they are extremely busy with work and school. For example, students and workers begin their day in the morning and generally do not finish until the early evening where there are then other domestic duties to fulfill such as housework and homework. This leaves little time in the day to exercise. Compounding this conundrum is the fact that most urban people are generally stationary while they perform their duties. This can be clearly seen by the modern chair and desk which are the apparatuses from which nearly all city dwellers work and study from.
Although these problems are serious, there are some innovative solutions which can address them. To begin with, people must integrate exercise into their daily lives and find creative ways to engage in physical activity during their workday. This could be accomplished by walking more, taking the stairs whenever possible, and using breaks as a time to do stand in place exercises. Furthermore, people could transform their homes into gyms just by doing push-ups, sit-ups, jumping-jacks, and other extremely healthy and free exercises in their domestic spaces.
In conclusion, citizens of metropolises spend long periods of time sitting and have considerable time constraints to exercising, however, these can be dealt with by vigorously exercising during breaks and in the domestic sphere. If urban people take advantage of these simple suggestions they will add significant amounts of exercise into their lives.
Coherence and Cohesion
Grammatical Range and Accuracy 9
The task is generally fulfilled sufficiently, and there is good extension of main ideas. One relevant idea that was not considered was the fact that many cities do not have enough space for physical exercise (such as parks), so this prevented the essay from reaching band 9.
Paragraphing is fully sufficient, with clear central topics and logical arrangement, and there is a wide range of cohesive devices [this phenomenon | these problems | address them | To begin with | other extremely healthy and free exercises].
There is a wide range of vocabulary used with precision and control [not as conducive | domestic duties | integrate exercise into their daily lives | taking the stairs | domestic sphere]. There are no obvious mistakes of word choice or form, although in one instance there could have been hyphenation [stand in place exercises].
There is a wide range of structures used flexibly and appropriately [as well as offer some recommendations | Although these problems are serious | people must integrate exercise | this could be accomplished by walking more]. There are only very minor slips (such as punctuation) that have no effect on communication.