The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram reveals percentages of divorce between 2011 and 2015 in Finland and Sweden. Overall, it can be clearly observed that Sweden began the period with higher rates of divorce but these fell substantially over the period and ended below Finland's percentage which experienced a noticeable increase.
Sweden's divorce percentage started at about 45% in 2011 and then rose and hit a peak of nearly 50% in 2012 while Finland dropped from approximately 38% to 33%. From this point in time Sweden gradually declined by a few percentage points in 2013 and 2014 before significantly falling to around 36% at the end of the period.
Meanwhile, Finland witnessed an opposite trend which saw it increase markedly to just under 40% in 2013. It's divorce rate grew slightly from there to 41% in 2014 whereby it stabilized and ended at this same level in 2015.
In conclusion, divorces in Finland hit a low in 2012 and then increased over the period whereby Sweden's percentages reached a high in 2012 and then proceeded to decline and finish below Finland's in 2015.
Coherence and Cohesion 9
Lexical Resource 8
Grammatical Range and Accuracy 8
All requirements of the prompt are fully and appropriately explored. No relevant information could be added to improve task achievement.
The message is easily followed Cohesion is skillfully used and attracts no attention. Paragraphing is well managed.
A wide resource is fluently used with flexibility to convey precise meaning. There is skillful use of some uncommon items despite occasional inaccuracies in word choice. Ex. In paragraph 4 (period whereby Sweden's) "whereby" is an archaic term, best avoided, and is used incorrectly in this case.
A wide range of structures are flexibly used. The majority of sentences are error- free and punctuation is managed well. Ex. paragraph 3 (Finland witnessed an opposite trend) better (Finland witness the opposite trend).
Task 2: Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people.Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?
Museums, monuments, and historical sites are an important part of society and are mostly frequented by travelers and not their local populations. This is due to the fact that the local population is fixed whereas tourist numbers are not and there are a few measures that could be implemented to increase local traffic.
Local traffic at museums and places of historical interest are low and tourist numbers are high due to a few simple factors. First of all, the local population is finite and people generally go to a museum once over a lengthy period of time. In my experience, after I go out to see a museum, I feel satisfied and rarely have a reason to return and repeat the experience. Additionally, if a museum is near to where I live, I may put it off indefinitely knowing I can go there anytime I want so there is less urgency. In regards to tourists, they are not finite and continue to arrive constantly to visit historical monuments and museums during their travels. On top of this, they have an urgency to see them as they might never have the opportunity again.
There are several ways to increase the local attendance rate for museums and historical sites. To start, they should incorporate events and interactive activities to lure the local populace. As an illustration, museums could set up school programs where local students come and learn about certain artifacts, exhibits or historical events in depth and coordinate this with the school authorities. Furthermore, they could hold special events at these important historical places on holidays and encourage people to visit and celebrate there several times a year. In my experience, this was offered at a historical monument where I grew up and I visited it quite often as they held holiday festivals there.
To conclude, locals are not visiting nearby museums and historical sites enough because after frequenting them once people are generally satisfied and coordinating new events into these places could help expand local attendance figures. If this is initiated, then local attendances are likely to increase.
Coherence and Cohesion 8
Lexical Resource 7
Grammatical Range and Accuracy 7
All parts of the prompt are addressed and fully explored. A clear well developed position is presented and supported that directly answers the question. Ideas are relevant and well extended.
The message is easily followed. Ideas are relevant and logically sequenced. Paragraphing is used appropriately. Cohesion falls a bit short of a band 9.
A wide resource is used with some flexibility to convey meaning. There are occasional inaccuracies and overuse of some lexical items. Over use of "due to" and use of "there" in paragraph 3. Ex. paragraph 2 (I go out to see) better ( I go to see) Ex. (near to where) better (near where). Ex. paragraph 4 (events into these places) better (events in these places). But does not detract from overall clarity.
A wide range of structures are used with some accuracy and flexibility. The majority of sentences are error free. Inappropriacies occur but do not reduce the communicative effect. Run on sentence in paragraph 4 Ex. (generally satisfied and coordinating events into these places) better (generally satisfied. Coordinating events in these places).
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