Task 1: Line graph
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
The line chart compares visitors to a London museum from June 2013 to September 2013, a total of four months. It is clear from the data that the British Museum was the most popular in terms of visits although there were some fluctuations in the number of visitors across all three museums.
The British Museum was the most visited museum in London in 2013 June reaching to 600 thousand people. During the same period, there were roughly 550 thousand visitors to the Natural History Museum whereas only 400 thousand visited the Science Museum at the same time. Over the following month, visitors to the British museum increased to 750 thousand, its highest point throughout the entire period. In contrast, visitors of the other two museums decreased. With some variations during the subsequent two months', figures for the British Museum reached to over 650 thousand in September 2013 whereas the visitors for the other two museums also started increasing compared with the previous month and was around 450 thousand.
The British Museum maintained the highest visitors for the four months recorded period while the visitors’ number for all the three museums fluctuated throughout the given four months of the year 2013.
Coherence and Cohesion 8
Grammatical Range and Accuracy 8
All aspects of Task Achievement are addressed fully and sufficiently. Nothing could be reasonably added to improve the task.
The message can be followed with ease, however not effortlessly. There is good use of cohesive features, however there could have been greater clarity with more substitution and less reliance on “previous month/subsequent month”.
There is a wide range of lexical resource used fully appropriately [the most visited museum | roughly 550 thousand | some variations].
Grammatical structures are used with high flexibility and control. However there were some omissions of punctuation that reduced the rating.
Task 2: The users of social media, such as Facebook, Twitter, are replacing face-to-face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this way outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, there has been huge advancements made in the way we communicate, especially platforms such as Facebook, Instagram, and Twitter to name a few. Although this has brought huge benefits to people, some argue that it has had a negative effect on the personal interaction among people. In my opinion, the disadvantages of this trend do outweigh the advantages and I will discuss several reasons in the following paragraphs.
There is no denying that people derive substantial benefits from the use of the social networks and instant messaging. For example, technological devices give users an abundance of options to exchange socially. Facebook, Twitter, and others allow people to socialize regardless of their location around the world. This is particularly convenient for those who live abroad. Secondly, communication apps that are widely used provide a substantial resource for companies wishing to gain knowledge on how best to improve their products and services. This is done in form of ratings and surveys which can, in turn, enhance productivity and quality of work. This results in less verbal communication for both the individual and companies looking to become more efficient.
However, there are some existing drawbacks of this modern method of communication. For instance, In the digital, people are replacing the traditional way of interaction with an electronic method based on less dialogue and an increase of slang or ‘shortcut language’ such as emojis and increased uses of abbreviations. In addition, it is common to see many young people exist virtually online via Facebook or Snapchat instead of getting together physically where they would no doubt have to communicate using a language. This trend can lead to isolation amongst people on every level of society from school children, employees and in the family home. This can lead to an abundance of issues ranging from children not being able to express their feelings or thoughts adequately. One further consequence that people, and in particular younger age groups will lack the ability of older generations in terms of literacy skills and an understanding of social etiquettes. This will be more damaging to children and will also see a gradual decline in necessary skills.
In conclusion, I believe that this trend brings more disadvantages than advantages. Therefore, it is advisable that people should take into consideration in restricting the using of modern communication apps and media platforms.
Coherence and Cohesion 9
Grammatical Range and Accuracy 9
All relevant aspects of the task were exhaustively considered and analysed. There was a clear position presented throughout and supported with complete sophistication.
The message can be followed effortlessly. The sophistication of cohesive features is evident throughout [Facebook, Twitter and others | This trend | This can lead to | and in particular].
There is very flexible use of language and some excellent style and collocation [substantial resource | particularly convenient | literacy skills | social etiquettes].
A wide range of complex structures is used with full control [companies looking to become more efficient | an increase of slang | they would no doubt have to communicate using a language].