"The chart below gives information about “Istanbul Promo plus” sales in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant"
The histogram reveals 12 months of data from 2007 on the sales of Istanbul Promo plus calculated in millions of Turkish lira. Overall, it is evident that there were significant fluctuations in revenue throughout the year with the highest amount of Turkish lira being generated in March and the lowest amounts recorded in July and September.
Istanbul Promo plus sales began at 200 million Turkish lira in January, rose moderately to about 225 million lira in February before soaring and hitting a peak of 350 million in March. From that point revenue from sales plummeted over the following four months to just over 100 million lira in July. Immediately after this, revenue rocketed and doubled back to January levels of just over 200 million in August before plunging again to July levels of just over 100 million in the month of September.
October recorded a substantial increase in proceeds at nearly 175 million and Istanbul Promo plus sales ended the year at just under 200 million lira which was extremely close to where sales started off at the beginning of the year.
Coherence and Cohesion 9
Lexical Resource 9
Grammatical Range and Accuracy 9
All the requirements of the task are fully satisfied. Nothing relevant could be added to improve task achievement.
The message can be followed effortlessly. Cohesion is skillfully used attracting no attention. All paragraphing is well managed.
Full flexibility and precise vocabulary is evident throughout. A wide range of vocabulary is used accurately and precisely. Spelling and word formation are accurate.
A wide range of structures are used with control and flexibility. Punctuation and grammar are appropriate throughout.
Once children start school, teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social development than parents.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
Unemployment and joblessness are a continual conundrum for humankind and some have proposed that the state should only provide primary education and not secondary. I feel this would be extremely shortsighted and would exacerbate unemployment in the short and long term.
Education is key to remedying unemployment. To begin, the 21st century is an era of exponential technological advancement and extremely rapid development. Automation, robots, and artificial intelligence are rapidly replacing menial labor positions. An example of this can be seen with manufacturing which used to be performed by low skilled and educationally deficient individuals but has now been mechanized and is essentially being done mainly by technological means. In addition, many experts predict that artificial intelligence and robotics will devastate the number of job opportunities available to low skilled and uneducated people in the near future.
The education sector is also a huge generator of jobs. If the government stopped providing secondary education then there would be an immediate loss of occupations and unemployment would rise due to this alone. Vast amounts of educators and school staff are employed in secondary schools across the globe. Education significantly contributes to the gross domestic product of nations as well as the employment sector. Eliminating this source of economic activity and occupations would be multiplied against the effects it would have on an under educated population resulting in deplorable occupational conditions.
In a nutshell, if education is under emphasized then unemployment will be exacerbated due to the technological progression of societal occupations and the job market in general. Scholastic secondary preparation is critical to a future where most careers will be mind oriented in place of physical labor. If this is not realized then those lacking sufficient education may be reduced to either societal pets or slaves and those below this status might be utilized as either food, fuel, or fertilizer.
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Coherence and Cohesion 9
Lexical Resource 9
Grammatical Range and Accuracy 8
All parts of the prompt are addressed. A clear and well developed position is presented and supported. Ideas are relevant and well supported.
The message can be followed without effort. Cohesion is skillfully used and attracts no attention. Paragraphing is appropriately managed.
Full flexibility and precise use is evident throughout this essay. Sophisticated control of lexical features is shown in a natural way. Spelling and word formation is accurate.
A wide range of structures are flexibly and accurately used the majority of sentences are error-free punctuation is well managed. Occasional inappropriacies occur but do not reduce communication. Ex. P2 (physical education and more.) better: physical education among other subjects. P2 (and they certainly have been for me.) better to omit the personal and remain objective, this also affected TR.