You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
The diagrams illustrate the figures for a charity in America showing both the money generated and expenses. Overall, it can be clearly seen that donations of food were the biggest source of income for the charity while in terms of expenses, program services accounted for the majority of expenditures.
Food donations provided most of the revenue for the charity with nearly 90% of the total, at exactly 86.6%. In contrast, program services was the highest outgoing cost for the charity with just over 95% of the total at approximately 95.8%
The remaining categories were much smaller in percentage. Money donated from the community was the second largest source of income of the charity with 10.4% followed by program revenue at a much smaller rate of 2.2%.
The final three contributors were investments, government grants and other income at a combined 0.8%.
Coherence and Cohesion
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Key features are covered and a clear overview is provided. However, minor details are missing (fundraising, management/general) and greater extension is needed. This report is somewhat underlength.
The message can be followed very easily, and paragraphing is fully appropriate. There are a wide range of cohesive devices [Overall | in terms of | In contrast | The remaining categories | The final three].
Lexical resource is used with full precision and control. There was very sophisticated use of style and collocation [money generated and expenses | majority of expenditures | outgoing cost | much smaller in percentage].
There is a wide range of structures used with full control [donations of food were the biggest source of income | program services accounted for the majority of expenditures]. There were no obvious errors of grammar.
Expenditures had fewer categories than income with only fundraising and Management and general costing over 4% of expenses at approximately 4.2%. Overall, the Charity was able to operate without suffering a loss as income figures of $53,561,580 were greater than total costs of $53,224,896 meaning that overheads were covered.
Task 2: The news media have become too much influence in people lives today and this is a negative development . To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that with the advancement of technology such as the internet, wifi etc, has made it both easier and faster for media to deliver information and news to the public. As a result, it has become more influential than ever before. Some people believe that these influences are a negative development. In my opinion, I agree that the news media has had a range of negative impacts which I will analyze in the following paragraphs.
The Media in every country plays a vital role in delivering information to people in the form of television, radio or more recently, the internet. This has been particularly harmful to young children. For instance, many television programme nowadays air channels that highlight social problems such as celebrity scandals, numerous criminal acts, and pornography. As a consequence, children tend to imitate what they see so continued exposure to this content can harm their development and confuse a child’s developing morals and values. In addition to this, media advertisements pay huge sums of money to famous people to endorse certain products which are neither needed nor healthy for most people.
Another consequence of today’s media is the distorted image to which people are exposed to. For instance, T.V shows, commercials, and mainstream movies tend to always project a superficial version of people both mentally and physically. This has a negative influence on people as they try to aspire to be like their idols and in some cases, go to extreme and dangerous levels to achieve this. This is most damaging for teenagers as, both boys and girls as they are made to feel ‘less’ manly or ‘pretty’ unless they fit the image popularized by media.
In conclusion, there are convincing arguments that this has been a negative development for society. This media domination, in my view, needs to be regulated and its content and methods reviewed so that the negative impact on people of all ages is reduced.
Coherence and Cohesion
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
All parts of the prompt are fully addressed and there is a clear position throughout [negative development]. There is nothing that could be credibly added to improve the essay in terms of task response.
The message can be followed without effort, and there is a very wide range of cohesive devices [As a result | in the following paragraphs | Another consequence | This has a negative influence | their idols].
There is a very wide range of lexis used flexibly and precisely [influential | scandals | distorted image | popularised by media | media domination]. There are no obvious semantic or formation errors.
There is a wide range of grammatical structures [This has been particularly harmful | which are neither needed nor healthy for most people]. There are some non-systematic errors [with the advancement of technology…has made it…| to which people are exposed to | for teenagers as, both boys and girls as they are made to feel…]