Task 1: Line graph
The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
The figure illustrates data regarding the number of books read at Burnaby Public Library over a period of four years, from 2011 to 2014.
As can be seen from the graph, different patterns emerged for male and female. The amount of books read by men experienced and upward trend between 2011 and 2012, from roughly 3000 to approximately 4000. After that, the number increased exponentially to 14000 books in 2014. This was the highest figure recorded throughout the period.
Women figures began at a higher rate than those of men, but their numbers followed a different trend. Between 2011 and 2012, there was an rise in the number of read books, 5000 at the beginning of the period and rising to 5000 and 8000 books by 2012. Figures peaked in 2013 at approximately 10000. Subsequently, in 2014, their numbers fell back to 8000 again.
Overall, there was a strong upward trend in the number of books read by men. Although women read more books than men in 2011, their reading fell to below the level of men in 2014.
Task Achievement: 7
Coherence & Cohesion: 7
Lexical Resource: 7
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 7
The requirements of the task are covered. There is a clear overview [Overall, there was a strong upward trend…], and content was relevant and accurate. There could have been more illustration/extension of key features.
There is a clear progression throughout the response. Substitution and reference are used flexibly [After that, the number…| This was the highest figure | those of men | their numbers]. There were occasional inaccuracies [their numbers].
There was some flexibility and precision in the resource [different patterns emerged | the number increased exponentially]. There were some inaccuracies [amount of books | read books | their reading fell | women figures].
There was a range of complex structures and error-free sentences were frequent [the highest figure recorded throughout the period | there was a strong upward trend]. There were some obvious errors [an rise | and upward trend].
Task 2: There have been many inventions in the human history, such as the wheel. Some people think the most important thing is the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Nowadays, it is inconceivable to image a world with no Internet for most people living in developed or in some way developed countries. Many years ago no one could ever imagine that such a network and hub of information as the Internet would be invented. As such, life without the Internet is un-imaginable. In my opinion every invention has its place in the timeline of civilization but the Internet is the greatest development and advancement made by us, of our time.
Firstly, this information superhighway provides an enormous amount of information. For instance , people with access can search a variety of data on an infinite number of wide ranging topics. In addition, people are able to find information on specific subjects they are interested in, researching or learning for the first time. Although this equates to vast learning potential, it can , at times, be dangerous. Advocates for safe use of cyberspace argue that young children are most vulnerable as they may be exposed to hazardous material in the form pornography and violence.
In addition to this, the internet has also presented many opportunities for con-artists, fraudsters and in general, people of low morals and values. As a result, innocent users can be easily misled to give their bank details , as an example and as such, be cheated financially.
Secondly, peoples main way of communicating is through the interconnected networks of the Internet. As an example, real-time communication and instant messaging with someone who is in another part of the world is the norm for over two-thirds of the planets populations connected to the Internet.
These same people exist in a virtual world of social networks like “Facebook” , “Twitter”, “Instagram”,etc. So they can keep in touch with their friends in distant places, or make new ones through recommendations or mutual connections.
However, this way of communication can sometimes be inefficient and has drawn criticism. People on this side argue that Face-to-face conversation is much better and in a sense , much more meaningful. In addition to this, some others argue that it is easy to waste a lot of time on the internet through countless scrolling of news feeds, memes , humorous videos and so on. The main consequence of such a trend has meant more sedentary lifestyles for a large proportion of people. One final point on further disadvantages is the inclusion of personal information which again , can result in potential harmful outcomes.
To conclude, there are many great inventions and the Internet is a collection and end journey of countless other inventions that finally led to the development of what we know as the Internet. Every one of them was important for its time. But The Internet, even with its flaws, is the most important invention of our modern time.
Task Response: 7
Coherence & Cohesion: 7
Lexical Resource: 8
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 8
All parts of the prompt are addressed. A clear position is presented and ideas are supported, although there could be more development and extension of idea.
There is a clear overall progression, with paragraphs presented with clear central topics. However, paragraphing was not used sufficiently and appropriately, with some paragraphs not fully developed (e.g. with topic sentences, main and supporting ideas and concluding sentences).
There was flexibility and precision [inconceivable | cheated financially | important for its time | even with its flaws]. Some errors are evident [image a world], but they do not seriously impact on communication.
A wide range of structures is used [countless other inventions that finally led to the development of what we know as the internet]. Error-free sentences are the majority, although there are rare errors. Punctuation was appropriate, although there were rare omissions [many years ago no one].