IELTS Actual Test at BC & IDP 30.09.2017 (with sample paragraph)

IELTS Actual Test at BC & IDP 30.09.2017 (with sample paragraph)

 

Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The table below gives information about languages with the most native speakers.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Languages with the most native speakers
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IELTS Writing Task 1

The diagram illustrates the six most widely spoken languages in the world categorized by native speakers, additional language speakers, and total number of speakers. Overall, it can be clearly observed that Mandarin Chinese dominates the list of native speakers and tops the list of total speakers, while English ranks first in number of speakers as an additional language.

            Mandarin Chinese is far and away the leader in total number of native speakers at 900 million followed by Hindi, Spanish, and English at 370, 350, and 339 million, respectively. English heads the list of number of speakers as an additional language at 603 million, followed by Mandarin Chinese and Hindi at 190 and 120 million, correspondingly. Portuguese rank last with a mere 10 million.

            Turning to total number of speakers, again Mandarin Chinese lead this category with well over 1 billion speakers followed closely by English at nearly 950 million speakers. Hindi ranks third and Spanish fourth with 490 and 420 million, subsequently, with Arabic and Portuguese at the bottom of the list hovering closer to 200 million total speakers.

Overall

8.5

Task Achievement

8

Coherence and Cohesion

9

Lexical Resource

9

Grammatical Range and Accuracy  8

 

The report meets task requirements sufficiently and the main trends highlighted and detailed. The task could have been improved by further emphasizing the highlighting of English as a language with more additional speakers than native speakers, going against the trend of most languages.

 

The message can be followed with ease. Paragraphing is fully sufficient for this task. There is a wide range of cohesive devices [Overall | while | followed by | correspondingly | Turning to].

There is a very wide range of vocabulary used with full flexibility and precision. Style and collocation are evident throughout [widely spoken | dominates the list | mere 10 million | followed closely | hovering closer]. There are no errors of spelling or word form.

There is a wide range of structures, flexibly used, and most sentences are error-free. Some sentences have errors of subject-verb agreement [Mandarin Chinese lead | Portuguese rank], and occasional omissions of punctuation. This limits the rating to Band 8.

 

Task 2: The best way to reduce youth crimes is to educate their parents with parental skills. To what extent you agree or disagree?

 

Adolescent criminality is running rampant and pressure is being put on parents to help remedy this phenomena. I believe that the combined effort of informed parents and educators can tackle and solve this problem once and for all.

            Parents are the first step in this process and need to know how to control and discipline their children. The fact that my parents knew how to discipline me throughout my adolescent stage helped greatly into my growing into a law abiding adult. In addition, parents need to guide their offspring into constructive activities such as the arts and sports. In my experience both of these fields helped me utilize my free time doing constructive things rather than run around the streets and getting into trouble.

            On the other hand, I believe the educational system and educators are also able to make a significant difference in reducing youth crime and must do more than just instill responsible behavior into pupils. Firstly, teachers and the education system could integrate and offer various activities for the youth that would help steer them clear of crime and despicable behavior. Athletics are a haven for many youths who have too much energy and time on their hands. Many professional athletes such as Lebron James credit sports as the number one reason that they did not end up running around with other individuals who engaged in criminal acts. Additionally, offering activities and clubs for the arts and computers could greatly aid in keeping the youth focused on creativity instead of criminality.

            To conclude, it is clear to me that it will take the combined efforts of both parents and educators to help reduce youth crime and point youngsters in a more productive and creative direction. If society wakes up and heeds this call to action, the world, and life as we know it, will be all the better.

Overall

9.0

Task Response

9

Coherence and Cohesion

9

Lexical Resource

9

Grammatical Range and Accuracy  9

 

A clear position is fully developed and supported throughout the response. Nothing could be reasonably added to improve the response.

The message can be followed effortlessly. There is skillful paragraphing and a wide range of cohesive devices [this process | In addition | both of these fields | On the other hand | other individuals].

A very wide range of lexis is used with full precision and control throughout [adolescent stage | utilize my free time | educational system | instill responsible behavior | haven | criminality]. There are no obvious errors of word form or spelling.

Grammatical structures are used with range and precision [pressure is being put on parents | doing constructive things | rather than run around the streets | that would help steer them clear of crime]. There are a few minor lapses in punctuation, but Band 9 is awarded.